Proposal Feedback

I am very pleased with the feedback we got from our proposal. I am hoping in this next week to be able to storyboard our whole sequence and take it into the production stages. The only advice we had was to change a part of the narrative which i am quite happy about because i now realise that the bit we originally had didn't make much sense.

In change to our first proposal i think instead of running upstairs the main character should be chased upstairs by the criminal in this opening sequence. This should solve the issues that confused some people with our proposal.