Proposal Feedback

I am very pleased with the feedback we got from our proposal. I am hoping in this next week to be able to storyboard our whole sequence and take it into the production stages. The only advice we had was to change a part of the narrative which i am quite happy about because i now realise that the bit we originally had didn't make much sense.

In change to our first proposal i think instead of running upstairs the main character should be chased upstairs by the criminal in this opening sequence. This should solve the issues that confused some people with our proposal.

Intial Ideas

Individual Proposal

Since the group have already decided on a rough idea for our opening sequence all proposals tend to be the same with slight variations. However my proposal is probably more action thriller based than other proposals.

Syopsis:

A young man is limping as fast as he can towards a gate from outside. He is wounded and obviously trying to hide from something coming towards him. He runs into his back garden and into the house. From here he runs upstairs and into a room to hide. He looks out a window and noticed the figure he was running from. He quickly tries to hide somewhere (under a bed/in a cupboard depending on location). As he is doing this a loud bang is heard which is the sound of his door being broken down or maybe a window being smashed. This man who stormed the house walks upstairs at a calm pace but with much ferociousness. Loud noises are constantly heard of other doors being slammed open until he finally enters the room the victim is hiding in. All sounds silence until finally the victim is grabbed from behind in a sudden movement.

This is aimed at young male/possibly female audiences aged from 15-25.

Shown here is how i imagine the victim being grabed in the final shot. It is at about 43 seconds in this clip. There are faded shouting noises and it is a very fastly edited shot. I hope this would be very effective in creating a fear factor for the audience.